영작 숙제 좀 봐주세요.^^;(히잉....그냥 지나치지 마시구 도와주세요.;)

[영작]

Saturday May 24, Sunny

It's a birthday of Buddha.
I didn't need to go to school.
Because, the day is a legal holiday.
Actually, I hoped to go picnic with my family.
But they were so busy.
Dad had to go to work - though it's holiday! - and mom had to go to worship at a  temple.
My sister had to meet her friends.
So I had to take a rest all day all by myself.
Reading a book, listening to music, practicing musical instrument - my love clarinet!
These are things to done today.
Sometimes, I felt lonely having no one to do together.
I've wanted to make a special memory with my family in my school days.
I wish my family deeply appreciates about pleasure of 'join together'.



옆 집 중학생 아이가 영작 숙제 좀 해달라고 해서 대충 써봤는데, 문법을 다 잊어먹어서요.
틀린 곳이 있으면 알려주세요.
제 실력 들킬까봐 많이 걱정이 된답니다.
꼭 부탁드립니다.^_^;;

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lefal은 좀 이상하네요..그냥 public holiday

[지나가다]

It's a birthday of Buddha.

----> the birthday of Buddha.

저라면 차라리 Today is the birthday of Buddha 혹은 Today is Buddha's birthday.

라고 쓰겠어요. 그냥 그게 더 자연스러운듯 해서 ㅡㅡ;;


I didn't need to go to school.
Because, the day is a legal holiday.

----> Because, it's a public holiday.


Actually, I hoped to go picnic with my family.
But they were so busy.
Dad had to go to work - though it's holiday! - and mom had to go to worship at a temple.

--> though, it's a holiday!

My sister had to meet her friends.
So I had to take a rest all day all by myself.

----> all day by myself. ( all 이 두번 들어가서 좀 어색해 보여요)


Reading a book, listening to music, practicing musical instrument - my love clarinet!

---> practicing a musical instrument


These are things to done today.

---> things done


Sometimes, I felt lonely having no one to do together.
I've wanted to make a special memory with my family in my school days.

---> to make special memory (a 를 붙이면 추억이 아니라 단편적인 기억력이 되요)

I wish my family deeply appreciates about pleasure of 'join together'.

---> I wish my family to know about the pleasure of "join together" and appreciate it deeply.


그냥 지나다가다 ^^; 써본거에요. 저도 제가 맞는지는 자신 없어요 ^^;;

[원글]

정말 고맙습니다!!! ^_^