여기 영어고수님들이 많다하셔서.. 간단한 도움부탁드립니다.

[gajum]

중2남학생이고요,엄마 아이디 빌려 글쓰는겁니다.여기 유식하신분들이 많다 하셔서...

내일 영어 수행평가 말하기 발표인데요, 제가 쓴 글 문법상 오류가 있는지 쫌 봐주시면 감사하겠습니다...

I want to live in the countryside rather than city for several reasons.

First,we can enjoy the freshment of environment well. Almost many urban areas are already polluted but countrysides are not. Second,we can get along with many different kinds of organisms .We can learn about them. So I want to live in the countryside.

I prefer winter vacation more than summer vacation for one strong reason. The most important reason is that winter vacation is more longer than summer vacation. It represents that I can do many fun activities such as hiking and swimming. It will be very precious time for me to learn something. Therfore, I like winter vacation very much.

1 .I have known my friend, 김재원 for 8years.I first met him when I was in kindergarten.As he is not in korea now, we can not get along frequently. However we often call each other.When I tell my worries,he always gives me a nice advice. I appreciate that he is my friend.

혹여나 어색한 부분있으면 쫌 수정해주세요....(너무 많이 바라나..죄송함돠 중요한거라서요..)

[중학생이데]

꽤 잘 썼네요^^
그냥 몇가지만 고칠게요
almost many-->almosy all이나 그냥 almosr빼세요
more longer에서 more빼고
represents는 means
get along 은 hang out으로 고치면 더 좋을거 같아요
내용이나 전개는 손 안댔고 사소한 어휘 문법 몇가지만 지적했어요

[...]

1. the city
2. refreshing environment
3. Many urban.... but the countryside is not.


1. is longer 아니면 more long
2. The extra time allows me to do many fun...
3. It can be a very precious time
4. Therefore

1. , we cannot see each other frequently.
2. when I tell him, ...gives me nice advice.
3. However,

이거, 미국에서 태어나고 죽 자란 누나가 봐 준거예요.
학생 너무 귀여워서.. 내일 잘 하세요.

[지나가다]

I 가 어느새 we가 되어버리는 게 거슬리네요. 1인칭으로 일관성 유지

[gajum]

오 답변해주신 분들 모두다 정말로 감사합니다. 네이버는 내공 걸어야만 달리는데 여기는 참 인정 넘치는 곳이네요! 잘하고올게요 감사합니다

[아유]

뉘댁 아드님인지 귀엽네요^^

[... sorry!]

I prefer winter vacation more than summer vacation for one strong reason.
타이핑할 때 이걸 빼먹었네요. 어쩌지요! 학생

-> I prefer winter vacation to summer vacation for one strong reason